When I started my Down Draft, it was about how having my dad as my coach was hard , but that it made me the player that I am now. I've expanded it by also writing about how even with the pushing of my dad there was a time where I didn't feel like a very good player. And how I over came it. The most helpful feedback I've had was how to piece together both of the things that I wanted to write about. In order to make my piece awesome, I'd really like help with showing not telling, and adding more details.
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AuthorMarana Quintanar |